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12 décembre

The Visitor

He had a visitor that evening. Not a visitor he expected. Not totally unexpected, but not expected at this hour. The visitor reminded him of a meeting he had. This was a meeting he was looking forward to. He left with The Visitor, glad.

Thoughts moved through his head...rapidly, at a blinding pace. Memories, people. Betrayal, disbelief. Friends, foes. Life flashed before his eyes. No trepidation, no fear, no regrets. Just absolute consciousness. The Self. But there wasnt too much time. 20 storeys down sounds a long distance, but 4 seconds isnt too long.

The last thing he felt was not the concrete...it was the smell of blood in his nostrils...its acrid taste on his tongue...then....ethereal....

After all, how could he disobey The Grim Reaper inviting him for a meeting with His Maker?

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I had thought of this in the morning, but could make it only in the night...and it doesnt seem to work now!! :-(

Nevertheless, this is the first time I've tried something of this sort, comments and criticism will be more appreciated than usual.

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DelightfullyUnrefined a écrit :
i like it. alot.
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4 Jan.
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AnotherPrickOnTheWall a écrit :
While I post this comment I can't help but think...
Is peregrinus really at work overhaulin' the blog.. Or is he fast asleep coz of all the 'wild' 'adventures'..*Hic.. Lol In GOA..

Anyway dude.. I dont know if tht was my first 30 commenter.. But Whtever it is.. I'm liking.. :P

So get ur ass to the comp & start workin.. You've a lot to catch up on.. Sleep being one of them apart.. :P

Ciao.. & TC..
P.S: Btw.. I've updated..
19 Déc.
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icyvolcano_5 a écrit :
Hey You have changed ur blog's look..its beautiful blue..just the right for a blue blooded guy!

So mate enjoy Goa and as for poetry even I hvnt read after school but I love Ghazals so urdu poets I love & yes many hindi ones too who write awesome!
As an aside I dont understand complicated poetry too..many a times fail to understand zof..have to really think through my soul to understand him some times..haha
icy
19 Déc.
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Sar-cas-tic a écrit :
you have nikon..why would u need a cybershot!!
saw the best digi cam works..liked the 3rd,4th n 5th shots
would love to see goa captured
umm dunt like the way the above piece ends..as in the description!
19 Déc.
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leprechaunINaBOTTLE a écrit :
yes i've finshed college. will be continuing my education in a while.
went to visit a friend as i mentioned somewhere in the blog.
how were your exams? hope you did well enough.
caio
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19 Déc.
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Prerna78 a écrit :
pretty cool...fyi...i think something is cool when i cant make total sense of it...hehe! you going to goa..lucky you...my husband tells me stories about how fun a place it is..never been there..on my list of cities to visit...take pics while u r there..n enjoyy

btw..the book is more about accounting..more like "creative accounting" than legal...but equally interesting!!
19 Déc.
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AnotherPrickOnTheWall a écrit :
Hey peregrinus!!..
Ur 'eggjams' are over..
& theres still no sign of either you or that overhaul of ur space u promised...

What??.. Gone to goa??.. Noooo!!!!
Not fair!!..
Get back..
Babes??.. & Booze?? *Snigger...
If u dont get back soon.. We're gonna play an enactment of ur famous work.. & believe me.. Your gonna be the guy flattened on the concrete.. With the smell of blood in ur nostrils & the 'acrid' taste of it on ur tongue... LOL..

Ciao.. & Party Hard!!
17 Déc.
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She-Lucifer a écrit :
Have fun in Goa...
and dont let the boose, and the girls go to ur head(literally) :P

Take care... :D
16 Déc.
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zombiee a écrit :
nice peicea wrk.
wonder wat it wud have come out like in the morning.
most of ur stuff is intersting read.
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16 Déc.
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icyvolcano_5 a écrit :
Hey I loved this section about your beliefs..we see in the same direction on most. IMAGINE!
icy
15 Déc.
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icyvolcano_5 a écrit :
It still works..after all the nights since the visit .

Nice one! My blogworld is increasing day by day and new addition is peregrinus!
so long! enjoy the sand,surf, booze & babes..GOA it is after all!
icy
15 Déc.
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molina_ccr a écrit :
i think it's nice .. leaves me wanting more though ..

enjoy Goa dude!! ;D

and yes the pic of the passage is one of my favourites too.. again yes, all the pics in that album are my work .. used a sony digital camera (my sister's)
Peace...
14 Déc.
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MilleniumFalcon2184 a écrit :
ofcourse im all dat and more read carefully next time . da event and all is there. u mustve been in one real hurry dude.
14 Déc.
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leprechaunINaBOTTLE a écrit :
what a wonderful piece. since i just love mr.G R, i think it's quite quaint the way you've portrayed him here.

very interesting.

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13 Déc.
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zofo_9 a écrit :
nice start dinnae give up... develop it further.. here is something I WROTE about the angel of death..

http://spaces.msn.com/members/zofo09/Blog/cns!1ppBOoYHXblnA6JuwFNGysNw!4614.entry
13 Déc.
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JitenderSaan a écrit :
It's good. Needs more practice, as everything :]
13 Déc.
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She-Lucifer a écrit :
EEEEWWWWwwwww....Prickley heat powder gets grosser and grosser each day !!!
13 Déc.
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mysticalnightpixie a écrit :
well where are the vultures??...u know his body has to be eaten up...i mean it doesnt make sense to waste all that flesh...and juicy morsels of brain...;p
anyways nice attempt of posting for this sort...now i ask you what is this sort??why cant it be that sort??
good to see a post and as you say but dont seem to practice..write on..sades
13 Déc.
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AnotherPrickOnTheWall a écrit :
P.S:: next time include the gross details of how his bones shattered.. & how he wailed in agony.. & how blood spurted from a ruptured vein where the bones jutted out...
I saw the texas chainsaw massacre today AGAIN!!. & I'm just living to my mood.. :P
Ciao..
13 Déc.
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AnotherPrickOnTheWall a écrit :
Hmmm..
They had tea & samosa too?..Lol..
I dont know wtf I'm sayin man.. I'm just bored..

& HEY!! Don't be rude to my compression software.. I was missing the right codec when i compressed that song.. But its all cool now

& if ur smart.. You could probably decompress it back.. :P
& whatever dude.. A person who listens to ronan keating & celine dion(ugh!).. Can't quite capture the essence of S.O.A.D... J/K (But the album is really good dude..)

So while ur singing.. "My Heart Will Go OOONNnn..",...
*Snigger,
I shall stealthily vanish
Ciao.. & TC..
13 Déc.

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